When....
When ones soul is at ease,
when one has found itself truly,
when no bullet hits the floor after a gunshot is fired,
when no more sobs are heard for the loss of an innocent child,
when no child sits in the corner of a cold empty room
sobbing for the yearn of a blanket to keep warm,
when every child's thirst for a glass of water
or hunger for a loaf of bread is quenched,
when education is truly free for all
and equality is truly equality,
when no corrupt people exist in the world,
when all battles are over and wars ended with treaties,
when no woman is told she cannot have a child,
when a teenager refuses to take drugs,
when no hearts and promises are broken no more....
When ALL of this happens will peace finally exist?
Or will OUR world still be at war filled with
bustle and discord?
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This excerpt explains the entire world and how it functions to this day. while i was reading it, i felt so many emotions in my heart. we all need to take into consideration the improvements we need in our lives.
ReplyDeleteI agree with all the things said, we actually need all this things to make our world a better place
ReplyDeleteThis excerpt is truly emotional; It is hard to think that there was a moment in time when almost all of these were true. Humans are not perfect but at least we cant try to be by being kind, compassionate and loving human beings to the ones around us. "When no more sobs are heard for the loss of an innocent child," this sentence on the excerpt indicates all the young lives that are roaming around yearning for help and warmth. Everyone can make a difference in the world and this excerpt can help as a source of inspiration to build a better future for us and for the next generations to come.
ReplyDeleteI really like what you wrote. It definitely struck some emotions. Everything you said, is true. That's exactly what our world is like. And I hope someday, our world will truly be at peace. This is very inspiring.
ReplyDeleteWow that was very beautiful!! It is true; all of the points that you made is what we need in our world. It made think of poor people that do not have food and we all take advantage of it. I loved it, good job.
ReplyDeleteEverything that you said was really good. When I was reading it I thought of poor people and of those that take everything for granted. I really think that you opened a lot of people's eyes. We really do need to make our world a better place by changing for the better.
ReplyDeleteAmazing. This is the kind of thinking that this world needs. if people were to think more like this perhaps one day we might be able to achieve peace for all.
ReplyDeleteWow I have never read something that could make one person feel so much emotion all at once. This excerpt is both empowering and inspiring. If only every person in the world could read this and learn that our world does not have to be this way. That people can be good and dont always have to turn to the bad side. If only everyone could see that happiness will give for a better future not war and hate.
ReplyDeleteYour writing is extremely meaningful. I agree with everything you said its more or less an eye opener to all the horrifying events that surround us, and that sometimes we aren't even aware of. I believe that in order for a society to function there must be some sort of problems but only to a certain extent, and to achieve that peace everyone seeks for, we must all work together and make it happen. Great writing by the way.
ReplyDeleteThat was a real good writing. I like how you can describe what is needed to be done to achieve peace.
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